Xan the Fox

General:
E-mail (OPTIONAL): jloliver@cox.net

A brief description of your character: he is not a fox. He is a wolf. The name came from his brother. And he was well known as “the fox” He is a wolf. White fur with blue details. The blue enhances his features from making his muscles more defined to making him more handsome. There are two names, self proclaimed “the great white assassin” or “the fox.” The white is from his colors, him having white fur his clothes white as well. “the fox” was from how sly and quick he was. His clothing what resembles a white duster made from satin, with a hood to cover most of his face. a flag sized cape covering his right shoulder made of blue silk. brown leather boots, chaps.

Why is your character in Skuldhellir: followed family


Magic: none no reason for it


Strengths:
Natural: extremely athletic, light on his feet, keen senses, Free runs well, Can blend in with crowds, sly and sneaky, dexterous. His mood is usually a great one, unless he is bleeding he could get quite snappy.

Learned: dual wielding, hiding his true nature, concealing weapon and, hand to hand combat, counter attacking. Languages: common and drow.

Weaknesses:
Small 5’11”
Highly effected by magic[just say that if he were to be hit with a Frog spell, he would turn into a frog with little resistance, or a float spell, he floats. Mostly status spells like that.]
Has problems following the laws
Tries to avoid extended fights.
Relies on one hit knock outs or one hit kills.
Can’t take hits well.
Avid Bather
Required cleanliness
He prefers expensive cloathing
Deathly ill towards cold
Will not harm a woman under any circumstance.
Is allergic to hollyness. [such as holy water, preists, crosses]
almost no armor [best he has is leather]

First off: You need to write a physical desc for your alt while you're RPing in the dream. I've seen you without one. You should avoid a lot of the stuff about what your character is known as, how he was named, etc. You need a desc that's just a physical description of what he looks like--though including some smell and sound is ok too! :) The "brief description" part of this app is ok, I'm just talking about your desc in-game.

Second: numbers! :3

STRENGTHS
- extremely athletic: 3
- light on his feet, sly, sneaky: 3
- keen senses: 3
- Free runs well: 1
- Can blend in with crowds: 1
- dexterous: 1
- mood: 0
- dual wielding: 3
- hiding his true nature: 1
- concealing weapon: 1
- hand to hand combat: 2
- counter attacking: 2
- Pressure points: 2
- Languages: 0

WEAKNESSES
- Small 5’11”: 0 (5'11" isn't small..?)
- Highly effected by magic: 3 (how effected?)
- Has problems following the laws: 1
- Tries to avoid extended fights: 0
- Relies on one hit KOs: 2
- Can’t take hits well: 3
- Avid Bather: 0
- Required cleanliness: 2
- He prefers expensive cloathing: 0
- Deathly ill towards cold: 3
- Will not harm a woman under any circumstance: 2

TOTALS
23 vs. 16

You should remove a strength or two or add a weakness or two for him to pass. :) The strength total can be no more than 5 points greater than the weakness total. He's close, though.

i have changed a bit please look it over again.

You could let me know exactly what you added, changed, and removed? I don't want to make a mistake. :)

I got rid of Pressure points, and added Is
allergic to hollyness. [such as holy water, preists, crosses]
almost no armor [best he has is leather]

Removing pressure points gets rid of 2 strength points, and I'll give his allergy a 1-2 and his lack of armor also 1-2. Making the new totals 21 vs. 18-20, which is just fine. He's okay by me, now. :)

Other thoughts on the character?

not that I can think of. But thank you.

Awesome!

I meant that for the other people looking at your app ;)

I'm glad the player's actually responding this fast to feedback. Seems fine by me.

Looks alright here!

Movin' this, then! :)